Trifecta: Finality

He stood quietly, wind ruffling his hair, and watched her crush the talisman to powder.  The crunch of it under her boot was unnaturally loud, and this deserted corner at the edge of the city felt like the ends of the earth.

“You’re that sure.”

She didn’t even spare him a glance.  Her gaze was intent on the sparkling dust on the concrete, and a deep satisfaction showed on her face.  She spotted a thumbnail-sized fragment that had escaped destruction and hastened to remedy the situation, grinding it under her heel until what was left was lifted by the wind and blown away.

His hand lifted involuntarily to his own talisman, reassuringly safe and whole in his hip pocket.  “You’ll never be able to go back.”  He knew that she knew, that it was the whole point of the thing, but the words spilled out all the same.

She lifted her eyes to his, and they sparkled with an honest delight that he hadn’t seen in years.  “Never.”  Inexplicably, she gurgled a laugh, grabbed his hand, and pulled him off toward the city.

Welcome to this week’s Trifecta Writing Challenge!  This week called for 33 to 333 words on the third definition of the word CRUSH (verb):

1a : to squeeze or force by pressure so as to alter or destroy structure <crush grapes>
b : to squeeze together into a mass
2   : hug, embrace
3   : to reduce to particles by pounding or grinding <crush rock>

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  1. Draug says:

    Is this Inception inspired? Either way, it’s very interesting. I love the almost carefree attitude of the girl as she discards her talisman and takes off into the city with him.

  2. Joe says:

    Very good post. There is a finality to her actions that is palpable in the piece.

  3. Katie says:

    She must be carefree to know she will never go back…where might that be. Do you have plans for this?

  4. jannatwrites says:

    Good story! I’m not sure whether to admire her courage in embracing a life away from where she comes from, or fear that she acted hastily and may regret her irreversible decision.

  5. Brian says:

    The pacing of this felt perfect to me, and the way it moves, with the wind lifting the powder giving it just the right feel.

  6. I hope there will be more of this one.

  7. lexy says:

    I love that happiness that destroying the ties to her past creates in the girl. I feel bad for her friend, though. Poor guy doesn’t get it

  8. IASoupMama says:

    So much here — place feels very specific and your characters feel very specific, too. Loved it!

  9. sonya says:

    You know, it feels like a beginning to me versus an ending but it’s definitely intriguing! Good job and would definitely want to read more.

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